Out On A Limb
If evil broke into our midst with one lead bullet meant to shoot                        but one of us,...
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Judi,I read your poem in haste at TCP when I didn't have time to log in and intended to return and suggest you bring it here. I'm glad to find someone else made that suggestion. Time is short right...
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Judy--I've never seen octometer before, & I don't think it's fully successful here. I'm sure this could be whittled down to a less talky poem. If [evil broke into our midst with] one lead bullet...
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Hello Judi.My suggestion is to concentrate at first on writing sonnets in conventional iambic pentameter, and try for variations later, if you wish, once you have mastered the basics.If you check the...
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Judi,I'm sorry to take so long in getting back to you, but I knew I'd need an extended period of uninterrupted time, and they are hard to come by. If you haven't followed the links given at the top of...
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Judi,I will continue with the analysis of the scansion of your poem.line 1: 8 feet--iamb, iamb, trochee, iamb, iamb, spondee, iamb, iamb (spondees in the middle of a line cause 3 stressed syllables to...
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Judi--Welcome to the Sonnet Board.Mike has given you some sound general advice, and Melody has provided you withan exhaustive analysis of the meter and its problems. I just want to add a couple of...
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My very sincere thanks to all of you who took the time to respond and analyze my sonnet (i use the term very loosely now!). Your comments, and in some cases, the in-depth critiques were everything I...
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